一、续写材料
第二节（满分 25 分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
This was West Central in the early 2000s, a neighborhood of middle-class people born and raised by the tracks, people who never dreamed of leaving. Much has changed since then. Luxury apartments have replaced the rusted trains. It's barely snowed three inches this month.
Outside my window, another cold rain slaps Spofford Avenue. The park across the street is empty, a mess of dead-brown grass and dry leaves.
In my dreams, though, I see drifts of snow that are deep and blue enough to bury the moon. These are dreams of boyhood, of the gang of neighborhood boys who defined it. Back then, a couple feet of snow meant no school, and we played football every day.
Snow Bowls, as I remember them, were wild, violent events, a cross between sport and warfare. Without helmets or pads, we occasionally knocked each other unconscious. We broke wrists and bit ankles.
On snow days, we gathered on the big field behind our high school, where we'd pick teams, four or five a side. The captains were always the same. Matt Moore was a captain because he was faster and stronger than the rest of us and actually had experience playing organized football. Jimmy White was the other because he brought the football, and he believed supplying the equipment somehow gave him the right.
The games were untimed and there were hardly any rules. We played until the snow melted under our feet, or until someone got seriously hurt. The best Snow Bowls occurred when snow was still falling, covering our tracks and silencing the world around us. In the evenings, we'd play under the field lights, feeling like pros.
Two decades later, I'm the only former Snow Bowler who still resides in Spokane. The ones who moved away like to ask me for updates on home, as if our city is an elderly relative dying from cancer, and I'm the lone caregiver. I always steer (引导) our conversations back to the weather, especially the startling lack of snow this winter.
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Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion.
We hurried outside, and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets.
二、故事情节梳理
1.故事背景与现状
地点与时间：美国斯波坎市（Spokane）的中西部社区，时间跨度从 2000 年代初到二十年后的今天。
环境变化：曾经是铁轨旁的中产阶级聚居区，如今锈迹斑斑的火车被豪华公寓取代，城市面貌彻底改变。
气候现状：当年冬天降雪极少，只有不到三英寸，街道和公园一片萧瑟，与记忆中的大雪形成强烈反差。
2.核心回忆：童年 “雪碗足球赛”
这是故事的情感核心，也是作者最珍视的记忆：
起源：童年时，只要下暴雪、学校停课，一群邻家男孩就会自发组织 “雪碗足球赛”。
比赛特点：狂野、无规则，没有护具，常有人受伤（撞晕、摔断手腕），更像 “混战” 而非运动。
固定规则：在高中操场分队，每队 4-5 人；队长固定为马特（速度力量最强，有正规球赛经验）和吉米（自带足球，认为提供装备就有当队长的权利）。
最佳体验：下雪时踢球最棒，雪花覆盖脚印、让世界安静；夜晚在球场灯光下踢球，感觉像职业球员。
3.现状与情感
物是人非：二十年过去，只有作者还留在斯波坎，其他玩伴都已搬走。
情感寄托：旧友们总询问家乡近况，作者觉得城市像 “患癌的老人”，于是刻意把话题引向 “今年缺雪”，暗含对童年时光的怀念和对环境变化的无奈。
4.续写触发点
情节转折：上周末有人提议举办 20 周年高中同学会，紧接着大雪突降，为 “旧友重聚、再踢雪碗赛” 的续写情节埋下了伏笔。
三、续写思路
第一段：承接提议 → 唤醒回忆 → 触发转折
核心任务：从 “同学会提议” 切入，推动情节，自然引出大雪降临。
开篇响应：描写群聊里大家对同学会的热烈反应，旧友们纷纷表示要飞回斯波坎，话题很快从 “近况” 转向共同的童年回忆 ——“雪碗足球赛”。
情感铺垫：通过几句对话（如 “要是能再下一场当年的大雪就好了”），既呼应前文 “缺雪”
的遗憾，也为后续大雪突降埋下伏笔。
情节转折：在大家遗憾 “今年无雪” 时，有人惊呼 “外面下雪了！”，直接衔接第二段开头。
第二段：大雪降临 → 重现赛事 → 情感升华
核心任务：围绕 “大雪” 展开，重现童年场景，完成情感闭环。
场景还原：描写众人冲到户外，看到大雪纷飞的激动，立刻驱车前往旧高中操场，像二十年前一样分队、选队长（马特和吉米依然是核心）。
细节呼应：加入无护具、撞肩、笑闹等细节，还原 “雪碗赛” 的狂野感；夜晚球场灯光亮起，呼应 “感觉像职业球员” 的童年记忆。
情感落点：通过一句对话或心理描写（如 “雪会化，但我们不会散”），点明主题 —— 时光流逝、城市变迁，但友谊和童年的温暖永不褪色。
四、续写高级表达
情感表达类（适配怀旧 / 激动 / 感慨）
高级短语
be overwhelmed with nostalgia 满是怀旧之情
burst with excitement 激动不已
ignite a surge of joy 燃起一阵喜悦
swell with bittersweet sentiment 内心满是五味杂陈
thrill with pleasant surprise 因惊喜而振奋
brim with youthful passion 洋溢年少热忱
sigh with regret 遗憾叹息
well up with warm affection 涌上浓浓暖意
高级句子
1.The reunion proposal instantly ignited a surge of joy in our group chat. 同学会提议瞬间在群里燃起一阵喜悦。
2.Memories of Snow Bowls flooded back, making my heart swell with bittersweet sentiment. 雪碗赛的回忆涌上心头，我内心满是五味杂陈。
3.We were overwhelmed with nostalgia chatting about our snow-filled boyhood days. 聊起飘雪的童年时光，我们满是怀旧之情。
4.The sudden snowfall thrilled us with pleasant surprise, wiping off all regret of the snowless winter. 突降的大雪让我们惊喜振奋，扫尽了整个无雪寒冬的遗憾。
动作描写类（适配重聚 / 球赛 / 行动）
高级短语
dash outdoors in haste 火速冲向户外
scramble to gather 慌忙集结
toss on warm outerwear 匆匆披上厚外套
race to the old field 飞奔往日球场
claim captaincy eagerly 争相当队长
lunge for the football 猛扑抢球
charge forward bravely 奋勇冲锋
cheer and holler loudly 高声欢呼呐喊
高级句子
1.We tossed on coats without hesitation and dashed outdoors, boots thudding in haste. 我们毫不犹豫披上外套火速冲出去，靴子踏地咚咚作响。
2.On hearing the snow news, old pals scrambled to gather, eager to revisit our childhood game. 听闻下雪，老朋友们慌忙集结，盼着重温童年球赛。
3.Matt and Jimmy instantly claimed captaincy as before, rushing to pick teammates first. 马特和吉米像从前一样立刻争当队长，抢先挑选队友。
4.We lunged for the football and charged forward, just like the fearless boys we used to be. 我们猛扑抢球、奋勇冲锋，一如当年无畏的少年模样。
场景描写类（适配大雪 / 球场 / 环境）
高级短语
a thick blanket of snow 厚厚的积雪
snowflakes cascade down 雪花纷纷扬扬飘落
swirl in the cold air 寒风中肆意飞舞
wrap the world in serenity 让世界裹上静谧
illuminate the old field 照亮旧球场
crunch underfoot 脚下发出嘎吱声
glow with warm light 泛着温暖灯光
cover the ground in white 银装素裹大地
高级句子
1.Thick snowflakes cascaded down, covering the whole neighborhood in a pristine white blanket. 大片雪花纷纷扬扬落下，给整个街区盖上一层洁白积雪。
2.Snow swirled wildly, silencing the city exactly as it did twenty years ago. 雪花肆意飞舞，让城市陷入沉寂，和二十年前一模一样。
3.The old school field glowed under the lights, snow crunching crisply under our boots. 旧高中球场在灯光下泛着光，积雪在我们脚下发出清脆的嘎吱声。
4.Luxury apartments replaced rusted trains, yet the snow-cloaked field still felt familiar. 豪华公寓早已取代锈迹火车，可银装素裹的球场依旧熟悉暖心。
主旨升华类（适配时光 / 友谊 / 变迁与永恒）
高级短语
stand the test of time 经受时光考验
transcend the passage of time 超越岁月流逝
remain untouched by time 未被时光改变
witness profound changes 见证翻天覆地的变化
enduring lifelong friendship 真挚长存的友谊
cherish timeless memories 珍藏永恒回忆
unbroken bond between pals 挚友间牢不可破的情谊
高级句子
1.The city has transformed greatly, but our friendship has stood the test of time. 城市早已物是人非，可我们的友谊经受住了时光的考验。
2.Time fades away, but our cherished memories transcend the passage of years. 时光匆匆流逝，可那些珍贵回忆却能超越岁月长河。
3.Snow melts eventually, but the warmth of our friendship lasts forever. 雪花终会消融，可友谊的温暖永远留存心底。
4.Changes mark the years, yet some precious things remain untouched by time. 岁月虽留下变迁的痕迹，却总有珍贵之物未被时光改变。
五、范文赏析
Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion. The old class group chat instantly ignited a surge of excitement, with former pals scattered across cities confirming their return eagerly. Chatting about our boyhood days, we were overwhelmed with nostalgia, reminiscing about those wild Snow Bowls—violent yet cherished games that once filled our snowy winters. Amid the bittersweet sentiment, we sighed with regret over this snowless season, mourning the faded joy of snow-covered matches. Just as we felt disappointed, a friend’s urgent message popped up: “Snow’s falling heavily!” We tossed on warm outerwear in a flash and dashed outdoors in haste, hearts brimming with pleasant surprise.
We hurried outside, and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets, soon wrapping the world in serenity with a thick blanket of pristine white. We raced to the old high school field without delay. Matt and Jimmy instantly claimed captaincy as before, their competitive spirits still burning bright. The game erupted; no timers, no protective pads, just us lunging for the football and charging forward, cheers echoing through the quiet night. When the field lights flickered on, we felt exactly like the young pros we’d dreamed of being. Though luxury apartments had replaced rusted trains and years had passed, our friendship forged in snow and laughter stood the test of time, warm and unbreakable.
译文：
上周末，有人提出举办高中毕业 20 周年同学会的想法。昔日班级群瞬间燃起一阵兴奋，遍布各地的老朋友们纷纷热切确认会赶回。聊起童年时光，我们满是怀旧之情，追忆起那些狂野的雪碗足球赛 —— 那些曾点缀我们寒冬、无拘无束却无比珍贵的赛事。满心五味杂陈间，我们为这个无雪的冬天遗憾叹息，惋惜雪中球赛那份逝去的快乐。正当失落悄然蔓延，一位朋友的紧急消息弹出：“快看外面！” 我们立刻披上厚外套，火速冲向户外，心中满是惊喜悸动。
我们赶紧跑到外面，果然，大片大片的雪花正纷纷扬扬落下，很快便给世界裹上一层洁白纯净的厚积雪，静谧又美好，一如数十年前。我们马不停蹄奔向那片旧高中操场。马特和吉米像从前一样立刻争当队长，竞技热情依旧炽热。球赛即刻开始：没有计时器，没有护具，只有我们猛扑抢球、奋勇冲锋，欢呼声在寂静的夜空回荡。当球场灯光亮起，我们仿佛又变回当年憧憬中的少年 “职业球员”。纵使锈迹火车早已被豪华公寓取代，岁月悄然流逝，这份在风雪与欢笑中铸就的友谊，已然经受住时光的考验，温暖而坚不可摧。
范文赏析要点：
一、高级词汇短语密集，提分亮点突出（高考核心得分点）
用高级表达替代基础词，精准传情且显功底
1.ignite a surge of excitement（燃起一阵兴奋）
例句：The old class group chat instantly ignited a surge of excitement.
赏析：比普通 “became excited” 生动，精准体现群聊瞬间沸腾的热烈感，画面感拉满。
2.overwhelmed with nostalgia（满是怀旧之情）
例句：Chatting about our boyhood days, we were overwhelmed with nostalgia.
赏析：替代 “missed the past”，情感浓度更高，契合中年回望童年的深沉心境。
3.thick blanket of pristine white（洁白纯净的厚积雪）
例句：soon wrapping the world in serenity with a thick blanket of pristine white.
赏析：用比喻手法写积雪，比 “a lot of white snow” 优美，既表雪厚又显雪净，呼应前文童年雪景记忆。
4.stand the test of time（经受住时光考验）
例句：our friendship forged in snow and laughter stood the test of time.
赏析：经典高分短语，凝练点出友谊跨越岁月的核心主旨，比 “our friendship never changed” 高级。
二、高级语法结构丰富，符合高考提分需求（复杂句式占比达标）
多用地道句型，句式灵活多变，规避简单句堆砌
1.非谓语短语作状语（高频考点）
例句：with former pals scattered across cities confirming their return eagerly.
赏析：with 复合结构表伴随，替代简单句 “Many friends lived in different cities and said they would come back”，简洁紧凑显语法功底。
2.分词结构作状语，衔接自然
例句：Chatting about our boyhood days, we were overwhelmed with nostalgia.
赏析：现在分词表伴随动作，开篇即勾连回忆，情节过渡丝滑，符合续写 “承上启下” 要求。
3.让步状语从句，凸显对比（升华主旨关键）
例句：Though luxury apartments had replaced rusted trains and years had passed, our friendship...stood the test of time.
赏析：用 though 引导从句，对比城市变迁与友谊不变，紧扣前文 “环境巨变” 设定，深
化主题。
三、情节衔接紧密，完美贴合续写要求（高分基础：不跑偏、不脱节）
1.承上：紧扣原文核心元素（雪碗赛 / 城市变迁 / 旧友离散）
例句：reminiscing about those wild Snow Bowls—violent yet cherished games that once filled our snowy winters.
赏析：直接呼应原文童年雪赛记忆，让续写与原文无缝衔接，不偏离主线。
2.启下：精准衔接两段开头句，转折自然
例句：Just as we felt disappointed, a friend’s urgent message popped up: “Snow’s falling heavily!”赏析：用 “失落时突降大雪” 制造转折，既承接前文 “无雪遗憾”，又自然引出第一段结尾
“冲出门”，完美衔接第二段开头。
3.回扣原文细节，前后呼应
例句：Matt and Jimmy instantly claimed captaincy as before.
赏析：还原原文 “队长固定是马特和吉米” 的细节，唤醒读者记忆，情节连贯度拉满。
四、情感脉络鲜明，层层递进（情感真挚是高分核心）
从期待→遗憾→惊喜→热血→温情，情感曲线完整
例句 1：We sighed with regret over this snowless season（遗憾无雪，铺垫情绪）
例句 2：hearts thrumming with pleasant surprise（惊喜悸动，转折情绪）
例句 3：their competitive spirits still burning bright（热血不减，复刻童年激情）
例句 4：warm and unbreakable（温暖坚定，升华温情主旨）
赏析：情感变化贴合人物心境，让故事有温度，易引发共鸣。
五、主旨升华到位，扣住 “时光与温情” 主题（升华立意拿满分）
例句：Though luxury apartments had replaced rusted trains and years had passed, our friendship forged in snow and laughter stood the test of time, warm and unbreakable.
赏析：一句话收束环境变迁与友谊永恒，回应原文 “城市巨变、故人离散” 的怅惘，点明 “时光会变，真情不变” 的核心，立意深刻。
易青兰，湖南省株洲市攸县一中青年骨干教师，敬业乐业，勇于创新，热爱生活，爱好广泛。她教学业绩优秀，教学教研能力突出。曾获攸县高中英语课堂大赛一等奖；获得攸县＂教坛新秀＂、株洲市第八届“教坛新秀”等荣誉称号。她说希望自己能成为一个眼睛发光、内心仁爱的老师，做教育种福人，以精致之专业，有趣之课堂，丰盈之爱心，立德树人，静待花开。
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