一、续写材料
第二节（满分25 分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
There were only 30 days left for the final PE exam. Jack frowned at his 1000-meter run score, another “Fail”. As the school’s well-known “coding talent,” he could develop practical apps that impressed everyone. But he just couldn’t finish the 1000-meter run. Every attempt ended with burning lungs and he always finished far behind the others, never making the passing grade. The PE teacher’s words struck him hard, “A one-sided life won’t take you far. If you can’t overcome such a small challenge, how will you face tougher ones?” Jack stared at his sneakers, sad and embarrassed.
That afternoon, Jack ran into Leo, the monitor surrounded by piles of handwritten records. “I’ve finally finished sorting this data. It took me hours,” he complained, “One sheet listed a 1000-meter result as 3’45” while another as 225 seconds; some names were written last-name-first, others first-name-last. How I wish there were a tool to collect results directly next time!”
Hearing this, Jack’s eyes lit up. “The PE office has recently been equipped with a set of smartwatches. I can develop a personalized app running on the smartwatches,” he offered excitedly. “When students run the 1000-meter race with the smartwatches on their hands, the app will automatically record their time and other data in a consistent format.”
Later on, Jack devoted all his after-school hours to the app. Having developed the app, he tried to input some data to test whether it functioned properly. However, using the previous handwritten records for testing was trickier than expected and bugs kept popping up. As Jack struggled for a solution, his eyes fell on the PE score sheet and the teachers words echoed, “If you can’t overcome such a small challenge...”
Suddenly an idea struck him, “What if I run firsthand data myself?” he thought. “That way, I can test the app in real time and also improve my running performance.” He shared the plan with Leo, who responded with immediate support, “I’ll run with you every step of the way.”
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In the following days, Jack and Leo trained on the playground with the smartwatches on.
Then came the PE exam day and Jack stood at the starting line, calm and ready.
二、故事情节梳理
背景引入：体育期末考只剩 30 天，编程能力出色的杰克却一直 1000 米跑不及格，体育老师告诫他 “偏科走不远”，这让他既难过又尴尬。
灵感触发：杰克偶遇被混乱的体育成绩记录困扰的班长利奥，得知老师希望有工具能统一收集成绩，结合学校刚配备的智能手表，他萌生了开发跑步数据记录 APP 的想法。
开发遇阻：杰克投入课余时间完成了 APP 开发，但用旧的手写记录测试时漏洞百出。这时他想起老师的话，决定用自己跑步的方式获取第一手数据，来同时测试 APP 和提升体能。
伙伴支持：他把这个计划告诉利奥，得到了对方全程陪跑的支持，为后续的训练和考试埋下伏笔。
三、续写思路
这篇续写的核心是双线并行：一条是杰克通过跑步测试 APP、解决技术问题的成长线，另一条是他通过训练克服跑步短板、实现自我突破的成长线。
第一段思路（In the following days, Jack and Leo trained on the playground with the smartwatches on.）
开篇场景：描写训练的具体画面，如清晨或傍晚的操场，两人戴着智能手表起跑的样子。
困难与细节：
技术层面：记录 APP 在实际跑步中出现的问题，比如 GPS 信号不稳定、数据延迟。
体能层面：杰克跑到中途就气喘吁吁，Leo 在旁鼓励他调整呼吸、保持节奏。
转折与进展：
技术上：杰克每天根据跑步数据优化 APP，修复了数据同步和格式统一的问题。
体能上：他的跑步时间逐渐缩短，从最初的 4 分多钟进步到接近及格线。
情感铺垫：写杰克在训练中的心理变化，从最初的痛苦挣扎到后来的坚定自信，为考试做铺垫。
第二段思路（Then came the PE exam day and Jack stood at the starting line, calm and ready.）
考试场景：描写考场氛围，如哨声响起、人群的脚步声，杰克带着智能手表起跑。
过程描写：前半程，他保持稳定节奏，Leo 在不远处为他加油。后半程，体能接近极限时，想起老师的话和训练的日子，咬牙坚持。
双线收束：
技术线：冲线时 APP 自动同步成绩到系统，数据精准无误。
成长线：成绩显示为 3 分 40 秒（及格线之上），杰克和 Leo 击掌庆祝。
主题升华：通过这次经历，杰克不仅完成了 APP 的开发，更明白了 “全面发展” 的意义，呼应老师的话，让故事有完整的情感闭环。
四、续写高级表达
情感表达类
高级短语
心头一紧 a tightening in one’s chest
重拾信心 regain one’s confidence
百感交集 a mix of emotions welling up
坚定信念 fortify one’s resolve
如释重负 a wave of relief washes over
高级句子
1.Every gasp for air felt like a battle, but Leo’s steady cheers anchored him, and he gradually found his stride, a quiet determination replacing his initial frustration.（每一次喘息都像一场战斗，但利奥稳定的鼓励支撑着他，他逐渐找到了节奏，内心悄然生出的坚定取代了最初的挫败感。）
2.As his time edged closer to the passing mark, a flicker of pride ignited in Jack’s chest—he was not just fixing an app, but mending his own weakness.（当他的成绩逐渐接近及格线时，一丝骄傲在杰克心中燃起 —— 他不仅在修复一个应用，更是在弥补自己的短板。）
动作描写类
高级短语
奋力冲刺 sprint with all one’s might
调整呼吸 regulate one’s breathing
步履沉重 trudge forward with heavy steps
咬紧牙关 clench one’s teeth
稳步前行 maintain a steady pace
高级句子
1.Jack’s legs burned with lactic acid, yet he pressed on, his eyes fixed on the finish line as if it were the final line of code he needed to perfect.（杰克的双腿因乳酸堆积而灼痛，但他仍咬牙坚持，目光紧盯着终点线，仿佛那是他需要完善的最后一行代码。）
2.With the finish line in sight, he drew on every ounce of strength left, his smartwatch beeping softly as it logged his final seconds.（看到终点线就在眼前，他用尽了最后一丝力气，智能手表轻轻蜂鸣，记录下他最后的秒数。）
3.He pumped his arms vigorously, his feet pounding the track in a rapid, steady rhythm, while his smartwatch continuously updated his speed and distance in real time.（他用力摆动双臂，双脚以快速而稳定的节奏蹬踏着跑道，手腕上的智能手表实时更新着他的速度与距离。）
4.When his legs felt like lead halfway through the run, he slowed down slightly, bent forward to
catch his breath, and then quickened his pace again with Leo’s encouraging shouts ringing in his ears.（跑到中途双腿如灌铅般沉重时，他稍稍放慢速度，弓着身子喘了口气，随即在利奥的加油声中再次加快了步伐。）
5.With the finish line drawing near, he clenched his teeth, tilted his body forward, and sprinted with all his strength, the wind whistling past his ears.（眼看终点线越来越近，他咬紧牙关，身体前倾，用尽全身力气奋力冲刺，风在耳边呼啸而过。）
6.After crossing the line, he staggered a few steps before collapsing onto the grass, gasping for air, but still managed to glance at his smartwatch to check the recorded data.（冲过终点线后，他踉跄几步瘫倒在草地上，大口喘着粗气，却还是忍不住瞥了一眼智能手表，查看记录的数据。）
场景描写类
高级短语
晨光熹微 the faint glow of dawn
晚风习习 a cool evening breeze
人声鼎沸 a buzz of chatter and excitement
尘土飞扬 clouds of dust swirling
哨声尖锐 a sharp whistle piercing the air
高级句子
1.The playground was bathed in the golden hue of dusk as Jack and Leo laced up their sneakers, the smartwatches on their wrists glowing faintly in the fading light.（黄昏的金色余晖洒满操场，杰克和利奥系紧鞋带，手腕上的智能手表在渐暗的光线里微微发亮。）
2.The starting whistle cut through the air, and the thud of dozens of sneakers hitting the track echoed across the field, Jack’s steady stride blending seamlessly into the rhythm of the crowd.（起跑哨声划破天际，几十双运动鞋撞击跑道的声响在操场上回荡，杰克稳定的步点完美融入了人群的节奏中。）
主旨升华类
高级短语
全面发展 holistic development
突破局限 break through one’s limitations
自我超越 transcend oneself
成长的馈赠 the gift of growth
高级句子
1.Jack realized that his journey was never just about building an app or passing a run—it was about learning that true progress comes from balancing strengths and weaknesses, and that every challenge is a chance to grow.（杰克意识到，这段旅程从来都不只是开发一个应用或通过一次跑步测试，而是让他明白真正的进步来自于平衡优势与短板，每一次挑战都是成长的契机。）
2.As the app’s data flashed across the PE office screen, Jack smiled, knowing that he had not only solved a technical problem but also answered his teacher’s question: a life with both code and courage could take him further than he ever imagined.（当应用的数据在体育办公室的屏幕上闪现时，杰克笑了，他知道自己不仅解决了技术问题，也回答了老师的疑问：兼具代码与勇气的人生，能带他走向远超想象的远方。）
五、范文赏析
In the following days, Jack and Leo trained on the playground with the smartwatches on. The golden dusk bathed the track as they started running. Jack pumped his arms vigorously, his feet pounding the ground in a steady rhythm, while the watch updated his speed and distance in real time. When his legs felt like lead halfway, he slowed to catch his breath, then quickened pace with Leo’s cheers. Technical glitches popped up now and then—GPS signal faded, data synced poorly. Jack jotted down every bug, tweaking the code late at night until the app recorded all metrics accurately. Their PE teacher passed by occasionally, nodding approvingly as he saw Jack’s growing perseverance and the app’s smooth operation.
Then came the PE exam day and Jack stood at the starting line, calm and ready. The sharp whistle pierced the air, and he maintained a steady stride, blending into the crowd’s rhythm. In the last lap, his legs burned with lactic acid, but he clenched his teeth, leaning forward to sprint with all his strength. Crossing the line, he staggered a few steps, gasping for air, yet glanced at his watch immediately. The app uploaded his time—3’38”—to the system flawlessly. Leo ran over to hug him excitedly, and their PE teacher walked over, patting his shoulder with a smile. Jack smiled back, realizing this journey was not just about an app or a run, but about breaking limits and embracing holistic growth.
续写范文赏析：
这篇续写紧扣双线并行的核心思路，将杰克的技术攻坚与体能突破紧密交织，语言生动、逻辑连贯，完全契合高考续写的高分标准，以下结合例句逐一分析亮点：
1.场景描写鲜活，迅速代入情境
高分句型：[地点] + be bathed in [环境特征] as [人物动作], [细节描写]
例句：The playground was bathed in the golden hue of dusk as Jack and Leo laced up their sneakers, the smartwatches on their wrists glowing faintly in the fading light.
亮点：用 was bathed in the golden hue of dusk 描绘黄昏操场的暖色调氛围，搭配 glowing faintly 刻画智能手表的微光，画面感十足；非谓语动词 laced up 简洁交代动作，开篇就为训练场景奠定了写实又温暖的基调。这个句型能快速构建场景，让阅卷老师一眼抓住画面核心。
2.动作描写精准，兼顾技术与体能细节
高分句型 1：[动作描写], while [设备/技术功能描写]
例句 1：He pumped his arms vigorously, his feet pounding the track in a rapid, steady rhythm, while his smartwatch continuously updated his speed and distance in real time.
亮点：pumped his arms vigorously 和 pounding the track 精准描写跑步的发力动作，同时用
continuously updated... in real time 自然串联技术线，让 “测试 APP” 和 “提升体能” 两个目标的关联性更强。这个句型是双线叙事的 “黄金句式”，能让两条线索的融合毫不生硬。
高分句型 2：When [困境描写], sb. + [动作1]→[动作2]→[动作3], with [外部激励]
例句 2：When his legs felt like lead halfway through the run, he slowed down slightly, bent forward to catch his breath, and then quickened his pace again with Leo’s encouraging shouts ringing in his ears.
亮点：用 legs felt like lead 这个形象的比喻写出体能极限的状态，后续 slowed down→bent forward→quickened his pace 的动作连贯递进，再加入 Leo 的鼓励，既体现伙伴支持，又凸显杰克的坚持。句型的递进式动作设计，让人物克服困难的过程更具层次感。
3.技术线描写真实，符合逻辑与人物设定
高分句型：Every time [问题出现], sb. would [应对动作] until [问题解决]
例句：Every time the smartwatch failed to sync data smoothly, Jack would jot down the glitch immediately and tweak the code late into the night until the app could capture the running metrics accurately.
亮点：failed to sync data jot down the glitch tweak the code 等专业表达贴合杰克 “编程达人” 的身份，until 引导的从句清晰呈现 “发现问题 — 解决问题” 的过程，让技术线的成长真实可信。这个句型能清晰展现事件逻辑链，适合刻画人物的钻研过程。
4.情感与主旨融合，升华自然不生硬
高分句型：Sb. realized that... was never just about... — it was about...
例句：Jack realized that his journey was never just about building an app or passing a run—it was about learning that true progress comes from balancing strengths and weaknesses, and that every challenge is a chance to grow.
亮点：用这个句型跳出事件本身，点明 “平衡优势与短板” 的核心主旨，呼应前文体育老师的告诫；同时结合杰克的双重成长，让主题升华有具体的情节支撑，不空洞。这是续写结尾升华主题的 “万能句型”，能快速提升文章立意。
5.结尾收束双线，形成完整闭环
高分句型：As [线索1结果], sb. + [状态描写], knowing that he had not only [线索1收获] but also [线索2收获]
例句：As the app’s data flashed across the PE office screen, Jack smiled, knowing that he had not only solved a technical problem but also answered his teacher’s question: a life with both code and courage could take him further than he ever imagined.
亮点：flashed across the screen 标志技术线的成功，answered his teacher’s question 呼应开头的痛点，both code and courage 巧妙总结杰克的收获，让故事有始有终，结构严谨。这个句型能兼顾两条线索的收尾，让文章结构完整无缺。
易青兰，湖南省株洲市攸县一中青年骨干教师，敬业乐业，勇于创新，热爱生活，爱好广泛。她教学业绩优秀，教学教研能力突出。曾获攸县高中英语课堂大赛一等奖；获得攸县＂教坛新秀＂、株洲市第八届“教坛新秀”等荣誉称号。她说希望自己能成为一个眼睛发光、内心仁爱的老师，做教育种福人，以精致之专业，有趣之课堂，丰盈之爱心，立德树人，静待花开。
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